Thesis Statements

Thesis statements
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All three of these writers use logos, ethos, and pathos in their articles to reach out to their readers on the controversial topic, gay adoption.
How do they use ethos, pathos, and logos effectively? And why do you have three authors?


While both of these articles are able to strongly support their views, Coffey lacks logic involved with the studies and Alexander lacks reasoning and logic with involving background information.
Your points are good, but they are hard to follow as written. And what about ethos and pathos?



Maria and Kimberly both wrote unbiased articles using some credibility, many examples with a lot of emotional appeal, and logical information to make a stand against the issue of social networking sites.
Your pieces are good, but they don’t flow as well as they should (that rhymes ☺).
Use last name or full name, not just first name.


Both authors are for same-sex marriage, but how they go at supporting their point could not be any more different. Olson uses a combination of ethos, pathos, and logos evenly while Saunders relies heavily on pathos.
You are making a comparison, but you are still too general in terms of how the authors use ethos, pathos, and logos. And make sure you have one, clear sentence.


Although both Miller-Coen and Sheftel use different kinds of logic to support their views in their articles, they both pose convincing and concrete arguments about music education that easily persuades and engages readers.
Sounds good and has a nice comparison but needs ethos and pathos.


While both authors of my articles pose convincing and believable arguments using facts and logic, only one of them backs those facts up with emotion and passion while the other uses sheerly statistics and logic.
Your ideas are good and you’re almost there, but you word choice and structure is making it hard to follow.

He says that parents should pay attention to game ratings, but it’s up to them to decided whether their kid is ready to play the game or not.
Make sure you are addressing the effectiveness of the article and not debating the issue. Who is he? And there should be two. ☺ Come see me please. ☺ ☺

Using logos as a backbone to the articles, sharing a couple similar points, and the generalization and narrow-mindedness of the articles will be a few things that I will be comparing.
What is your topic? Make sure address ethos, pathos, and logos and how they impact the article.
Don’t tell us what you are going to do, just do it. ☺

Does someone have the right to terminate their own life prematurely, should the government be involved in the decision, or should the process come to a conclusion naturally?
This is the issue; you have not met the expectations of the assignment here. And your thesis statement should be the answer to your question, not a question. Author?


Despite the fact that they were dismissed, these authors think that science will bring this method of lie detection into courts in the near future.
You are focusing on the issue here, not an evaluation of an article. And make sure we know what you are referring to—thesis should not be dependent on other information from your intro.


While authors Jagriti Singh and Peter H. Schuck make their arguments for Commercial Surrogate Motherhood, their credibility makes their articles worth reading, their small use of pathos _______ them, and their varying use of logos separates them in effectiveness.
You have some good individual points, but work on how you put them together. What do you mean by “them?”


The articles are similar in: their belief, having facts for support, and having powerful men to present, but they are dissimilar by: the difference in those facts and credibility, the use of emotional connections, and by the author’s credibility.
Your separate ideas make some nice points, but together they are too hard to follow. You have nice individual points, but they aren’t put together as clearly as they should be.


These two articles are similar in many ways. Both of these articles use lots of credibility, and convincing emotion, but Laura fails to include points. One of the articles tells you the story while the other engages you in concern.Too many separate ideas, and sentences. How can you connect these points into a common evaluation? And make sure you include ethos, pathos, and logos. And use last name or full name, not just first name.


Both authors have the same goal in mind, to change people’s thinking of what patriotism needs to be, but Hufford uses more clearly defined ethos, pathos, and logos while Rollison’s article doesn’t define these as much.
Your sentence is clear and structured well, but your lacking specifics in terms of HOW they use ethos, pathos, and logos.


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Douglas A. Gentile’s article has more credible and logical research involved than Deepa Kartha’s article, which has some emotion involved and less logical information without credibility.
Reword to make more clear; you have the right points and ideas, but your actual thesis is hard to understand.


These articles each present a logical argument but with no emotional appeal, and Fainaru-Wada lacks credibility because he doesn’t provide proof that physical education impacts childhood obesity.
Your points are good separately, but they lose clarity when you merge them together. Pay attention to how you join your ideas so they reflect the comparisons you are making.



All of these authors are very qualified and knowledgeable about nuclear energy. Both articles use logic and are very credible, however one article is better than the other.
Make one sentence; clarify which article is more effective and WHY; make sure to include pathos



While both of these articles are very convincing, they use different tactics to persuade the audience of their views, and are lacking emotion.
Specify what you mean by tactics; don’t make your readers fill in the blanks for you—say what you want them to get from your thesis. And make sure you include ethos and logos.



Although both of these articles are very persuasive, it is clear that Beauty and Body Image in the Media shows more credibility with its statistics and The Media Lies shows more logic with the authors use of words.
You have a pretty solid start; make sure to include pathos and perhaps specify what you mean by “use of words.”



While both authors lack credibility and have strong logical reasons against home-schooling, Amy has a stronger paper due to her personal experiences of home-schooling.
Nice basis for comparison, but make sure you clarify that personal experiences pertains to pathos and not ethos or you have contradicted yourself.




Kate Transchel struggles with the use of logos, but back everything up through emotion, and Dearnley-Chalke struggles with their emotion verses their logic.
Make sure you are comparing the papers and not evaluating them individually. You have a good start with ideas but they need to work together.




While both articles depict strong logical arguments, “Human Cloning: Impacts to Women” lacks credibility while Zubin maintains his though neither show emotion, it benefits their argument and makes their ideas more intense.
Your points are there but are confusing to the reader. Work on how you structure your sentence as you combine your ideas.




Though both the articles lack key factors, together they produce a very convincing argument using ethos, pathos, and logos.
What do you mean by “key factors” and “together.” Make sure you have a strong, clear evaluation based on ethos, pathos, and logos and not just a list.



By using ethos, pathos, and logos, these two authors describe the majority of reasons why assisted suicide must not become an option for patients in our care facilities.The dominant part of your thesis is based on the issue and not the evaluation, and make sure you say how ethos, pathos, and logos impact the argument not just that they are present.


Both of these sources uses logical thinking and studies in their argument, but Anderson is more creditable by using his own studies, however, LGAIL uses more emotion in her argument in order to persuade the audience to believe video games do cause aggression.
Clarify your connections and sentence structure (and credible and creditable are not the same ☺).


Donna Hughes, along with Lindsayuse full name or last name only, never just first name, state that they are against legalizing prostitution by using logic and their own personal views, while Lindsay may have more emotion and logic, Hughes has more credibility.
Your points are good, but work on structure. How can you streamline your ideas here?

These two authors are convincing to their readers, however, Dr. Poarch uses more emotion to appeal to his readers while Ms. Nowjack-Rayner and Dr. Gift have more logical statistics to prove that mouth guards are needed.
Make sure you address credibility and work on how you combine your ideas. You have some good points, but your ideas are hard to follow as written.


Emery and the three police officers come from complete opposite sides of the spectrum, both, however, show an extreme level of emotion and logic in wanting this proposition passed, although Emery is lacking credibility in his argument, although he does come off a lot more persuasive and more convincing than the three police officers.
Organize and cut down on extra words; focus on your key ideas and making those points clear.


Comparing these articles really showed a difference in writing styles of ethos, pathos, and logos.
This is the assignment, not a thesis. ☹ Do this, then tell us what you conclude. ☺